When we first came up with the idea for our film we wrote a script. We had dialogue with the two characters but in the end we decided that having no dialogue would be better because then the effect of what the character has done is made bigger. Having no talking enhances the atmosphere of what we were trying to achieve.
1.ext.night.park [real time]
darren standing over josh's body on the floor.the grass of the park is redend by the blood of the josh face. light shining on his face.
2.int.day.house [flashback]
Josh is on his sofa in his room with loud music playing in the background playing xbox. his phone rings and he seems to be arranging a meeting in 'the park' with someone he is going to meet.
JOSH
hey darren. have you got it?
yeah yeah i got the money,you are going to be there?
alright cool. see you later.
after the phone conversation he gets up and goes to some draws and ruffles around at the bottom of the draw and pulls out a roll of £20 notes and realises its not enough and panics.
3.ext.night.park [real time]
darren going through josh pockets and finding a phone and his wallet while josh knocked out.
4.ext.day.road [flashback]
Josh leaving his house and walking to the bus stop, getting on the bus and arriving at the park. he walks to the meeting point always looking behind him suspiciosly.
5.ext.early evening.park [flashback]
darren picks up a gun and a bag of drugs from a table and puts it in the waistband of his trousers and the drugs in his pocket. he walks out the the door and shuts it after him.
6.ext.night.park [flashback]
they meet,
JOSH
hey man, how are you?
DARREN
leave it out, wheres my money?
JOSH
here it is, all here
DARREN
one sec, let me check
Darren checks the money then looks up at josh and realizes that it is not enough.
DARREN
what the fuck is this? you think you can do this to me? huh?
JOSH
its all there, i counted it... it must have fallen out my pocket.
DARREN
dont waste my time
Darren then walks away but josh tries to grab his pocket to steal the drugs.
DARREN
what do you think your'e doing?
josh doesn't have enough money and begs the dealer.
JOSH
please i'm desperate.
Darren then picks josh up and rams him against the tree. punches him in his stomach and hits him round the face, which makes josh unconscious.
7.ext.night.park
darren standing over his body.the grass of the park is redend by the blood of the boys face. darren then walks away slowly out of the frame.
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